fragil beauty
carpe Diem Tanka Splendor #19 Teika's 7th Tanka Writing Technique "clever treatment" (prompt: fragile beauty)
wind
blasts through the fallen leaves
once more
raked into perfect piles
now crowned with curls of smoke
© petra domina
Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on
How lovely this is. Well done
ReplyDeleteThank you. Not sure if I have the fragile beauty captured. Own worst critic are we poets!
DeleteHari OM
ReplyDeleteInteresting... my nose twitched as I swear I could smell it!!! YAM xx
(love the new banner!!!)
The banner is a photo I shot in 2005 as we were driving in traffic crossing the Susquehanna River in Harrisburg, PA. I photoshopped the shot to have it level, removed the banister and replaced with reflections. Then we had it printed on artist's canvas and it has hung in our living area since about 2006.
DeleteYes, I agree..what was misding was the smell of smoke_, byt in reality it eas there, even if if not rxokicitly stated. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment, Hamish. The smell of burning leaves is different than wood fires, etc. The leaves have now mostly fallen here and are blowing all over the parking garage. Not enough to rake and burn, though!
DeleteYes, I agree..what was misding was the smell of smoke_, byt in reality it eas there, even if if not rxokicitly stated. Well done.
ReplyDeleteNicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI think this lovely, and the end does denote 'fragile beauty'.
ReplyDeleteLady Nyo (Jane)
As noted in my email to you, still learning.
DeleteI love this, especially that last line. I'm still trying to figure out 'fragile beauty' myself:) A nice job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, jazzy! It was a good prompt to give the brain a workout.
DeleteI love this, especially that last line. I'm still trying to figure out 'fragile beauty' myself:) A nice job.
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