Sinbad's Fifth

Carpe Diem #1351 Theme Week ep. 5: The Fifth Voyage of Sindbad



hapless greed
vessel split asunder
karma
two legged beast of burden
sails in a coconut shell
©  petra domina

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CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI 


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  1. Hari OM
    Again you capture the essence of the tale! YAM xx

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    1. I keep failing to get a a deeper, spiritual layer. That is a real challenge for me. namaste, janice xx

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  2. A beautifully crafted tanka Janice ... it's for sure not easy to catch a deeper layer in these fairytales of 1001 Nights.

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    1. That seems to be the biggest challenge for me is all my haiku.

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  3. Very lyrical. And faithful to the core. I read your comment about trying for 'depth' and advise against it: that is the reader's job. Go for simplicity and clarity, and let the reader find their own depth relevant to them. They will thank you all the more for it.

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    1. I do appreciate your feedback, Hamish. I had not thought of it that way.

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