Better a little with righteousness than great profits without justice. Proverbs 16:8
Hari OMAgain you capture the essence of the tale! YAM xx
I keep failing to get a a deeper, spiritual layer. That is a real challenge for me. namaste, janice xx
A beautifully crafted tanka Janice ... it's for sure not easy to catch a deeper layer in these fairytales of 1001 Nights.
That seems to be the biggest challenge for me is all my haiku.
Very lyrical. And faithful to the core. I read your comment about trying for 'depth' and advise against it: that is the reader's job. Go for simplicity and clarity, and let the reader find their own depth relevant to them. They will thank you all the more for it.
I do appreciate your feedback, Hamish. I had not thought of it that way.