Sinbad's Fifth
Carpe Diem #1351 Theme Week ep. 5: The Fifth Voyage of Sindbad
hapless greed
vessel split asunder
karma
two legged beast of burden
sails in a coconut shell
© petra domina
waiting for autumn
Carpe Diem #1227 waiting for autumn (Aki tikashi, Aki wo matsu) in the summer heat perching black birds pant waiting for autumn © petra domina Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI
Hari OM
ReplyDeleteAgain you capture the essence of the tale! YAM xx
I keep failing to get a a deeper, spiritual layer. That is a real challenge for me. namaste, janice xx
DeleteA beautifully crafted tanka Janice ... it's for sure not easy to catch a deeper layer in these fairytales of 1001 Nights.
ReplyDeleteThat seems to be the biggest challenge for me is all my haiku.
DeleteVery lyrical. And faithful to the core. I read your comment about trying for 'depth' and advise against it: that is the reader's job. Go for simplicity and clarity, and let the reader find their own depth relevant to them. They will thank you all the more for it.
ReplyDeleteI do appreciate your feedback, Hamish. I had not thought of it that way.
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