Revise That Haiku
Carpe Diem Weekend-meditation #14 Revise That Haiku
chi ni taore me ni yori hana no wakare kana
falling to the ground
a flower closer to the root
bidding farewell
© Matsuo Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
falling to the ground
a flower closer to the root
bidding farewell
© Matsuo Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
tears flow
falling to the ground
autumn leaves
© Chèvrefeuille
falling to the ground
autumn leaves
© Chèvrefeuille
knees buckled
under the weight of grief
dove departs
© petra domina
Hari OM
ReplyDeleteCrescendo! YAM xx
smiling. namaste, janice xx
ReplyDeleteAh, a good capture Janice.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jazzy.
DeleteExcellent revision Janice ... very strong in its emotion.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kristjaan.
ReplyDeleteLove this. Your new blog pic is stunning.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ral. I consider this high praise.
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