teacher Get link Facebook X Pinterest Email Other Apps January 13, 2017 Carpe Diem #1123 the road is our teacher crunching against the leather soles pebbles speak youthful feet skip not hearing pilgrim moves in harmony © petra domina Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI Get link Facebook X Pinterest Email Other Apps Comments UnknownJanuary 14, 2017 at 1:28 AMWell you did teo things there....you found a brilliant angle in those first three lines to describe the sound of pebbles, andcompleted with two lines that played so well with the concept. Really enjoyed.ReplyDeleteRepliesJaniceJanuary 14, 2017 at 11:23 AMGreat! Thanks for your kind comments, Hamish. You are doing many fine works but no place to leave feedback. janiceDeleteRepliesReplyReplyKim M. RussellJanuary 14, 2017 at 2:15 AMI like the sound and personification in this tanka - they create a sense of movement together with those youthful feet!ReplyDeleteRepliesReplyBastet's Waka LibraryJanuary 14, 2017 at 3:49 AM:-) a great image and the onomatopoeic crunching brought the tanka alive from the very beginning. Bastet ReplyDeleteRepliesJaniceJanuary 14, 2017 at 11:26 AMGood to hear from you, Bastet! Hope all is well with you.DeleteRepliesReplyReplyB i r g i t t aJanuary 14, 2017 at 2:59 PMSaying a lot this poem!ReplyDeleteRepliesJaniceJanuary 14, 2017 at 11:19 PMThanks for your commenting!DeleteRepliesReplyReplyTournesolJanuary 16, 2017 at 1:06 AMSuch a long journey and there must hve been hours of silence...the crunching of the pebbles must have echoed so loudly...beautiful tanka, Janice!ReplyDeleteRepliesJaniceJanuary 16, 2017 at 2:17 PMThank you C-L. I loved my backyard rock paths and the crunch sound as I walked and worked.DeleteRepliesReplyReplyAdd commentLoad more... Post a Comment
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Well you did teo things there....you found a brilliant angle in those first three lines to describe the sound of pebbles, andcompleted with two lines that played so well with the concept. Really enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteGreat! Thanks for your kind comments, Hamish. You are doing many fine works but no place to leave feedback. janice
DeleteI like the sound and personification in this tanka - they create a sense of movement together with those youthful feet!
ReplyDelete:-) a great image and the onomatopoeic crunching brought the tanka alive from the very beginning. Bastet
ReplyDeleteGood to hear from you, Bastet! Hope all is well with you.
DeleteSaying a lot this poem!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your commenting!
DeleteSuch a long journey and there must hve been hours of silence...the crunching of the pebbles must have echoed so loudly...beautiful tanka, Janice!
ReplyDeleteThank you C-L. I loved my backyard rock paths and the crunch sound as I walked and worked.
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