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Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge Month May 31st: a haiku by Basho

The last of the May Tan Renga Challenge month.  A haiku is used as an inspiration for a two stanza response.  When a haiku is used in this way is is named a hokku.

do not doubt it,
the bay has its spring too,
the flowers of the tide                   © Basho (1644-1694)
flow from the warm river mouth
stripers have a shad picnic              petra domina

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

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Comments

  1. humbirdMay 30, 2016 at 6:05 PM

    Nice contrast here, also first line goes so smoothly, second one - brings the surprising revelation for readers ~ very cool!

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    1. JaniceMay 30, 2016 at 8:57 PM

      Thank you, nothing like a little surprise ending!

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  2. TournesolDansUnJardinMay 30, 2016 at 7:09 PM

    Oh, I love this "river mouth"...I wanted to bring in a river but did not how to word it...you did it so beautifully, my dear!

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    1. JaniceMay 30, 2016 at 8:58 PM

      I cheated, as usual. Went on line and read about bay activity in spring time. And there is where the river mouth came to mind.

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  3. Forest BatherMay 30, 2016 at 11:17 PM

    That's not cheating Janice, it's excellent research! I too rather enjoyed this a lot!

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    1. JaniceJune 2, 2016 at 2:23 PM

      Ok, so it is learning and allowing other input! Glad you rather enjoyed this one .. a lot!

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  4. Pat RJune 2, 2016 at 8:54 AM

    I agree with Humbird's thoughts on this..very well done Janice:)

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    1. JaniceJune 2, 2016 at 2:24 PM

      I was not even thinking of it as a surprise ending, just writing about Nature's events. Thanks for the kind comment.

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  5. ChèvrefeuilleJune 17, 2016 at 11:33 PM

    Excellent continuation Janice

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