Sunday, March 12, 2017

tree views

Carpe Diem Universal Jane #12 mountain view

awash in the worlds troubles the tree
waits naked through the cold of the year

approaching spring brings new growth that
laden with green weight the limbs of a tree

we humans were not designed to shed and 
renew ourselves with new growth like trees

in the mirrored lake does a tree see 
the unforgivable wrinkles of its age?

Oh, to be a tree with no wrinkles nor loss
of strength as the rings of age mount up on me!

©  petra domina


[ ... "The ghazal is composed of a minimum of five couplets—and typically no more than fifteen—that are structurally, thematically, and emotionally autonomous. Each line of the poem must be of the same length, though meter is not imposed in English. The first couplet introduces a scheme, made up of a rhyme followed by a refrain. Subsequent couplets pick up the same scheme in the second line only, repeating the refrain and rhyming the second line with both lines of the first stanza. The final couplet usually includes the poet’s signature, referring to the author in the first or third person, and frequently including the poet’s own name or a derivation of its meaning.
Traditionally invoking melancholy, love, longing, and metaphysical questions, ghazals are often sung by Iranian, Indian, and Pakistani musicians. ..."]

Well, I did not follow the rules.  I did share a thought that the tree across the street has caused to roll around in my brain.  Greening up the old grey matter!

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI


10 comments:

  1. Hari OM
    ...I had to imagine music with this one, as I am only familiar with ghazals in their sung form! I like the flow of thought here. YAM xx

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    1. With it being a first ever I was pretty unsure of the whole effort. I reread it to a sort of singsong. Makes a difference. namaste janice xx

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  2. True words that we cannot regenerate every year...or can we, in different ways? Trees recovery from lost limbs more easily than us of setbacks too...
    Perhaps because the role if the old tree in a forest is so important it allows itself the feelings of grandeur...

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    1. I like the grandeur thought. And those old trees are so grand.

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  3. True words that we cannot regenerate every year...or can we, in different ways? Trees recovery from lost limbs more easily than us of setbacks too...
    Perhaps because the role if the old tree in a forest is so important it allows itself the feelings of grandeur...

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  4. I didn't follow the rules exactly either...but i enjoyed your view of the trees! I think trees are always proud of their age :)

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  5. You did a good job on this Janice. I think I'll pass on this one:)

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    1. Thank you. I just decided to go for it doing it as an almost free write.

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  6. You did a good job on this Janice. I think I'll pass on this one:)

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