South Padre Island

South Padre Island

Wednesday, March 15, 2017

silence


snowflakes
settle on the mountainside
in silence
flake on flake lie quietly
then the avalanche begins

©  petra domina

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI














21 comments:

  1. This is beautiful...I love that last line...that's just life. It made me smile though:)

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    1. Some days I think I must be a millipede. Life seems to be waiting for the next shoe to drop and drop and drop ; )

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  2. Well that was very good. You seem to be on a very good run these days! I remember your superb haibun of some Yeats back (!) and really great minimalist haiku recently. Nice to see tanka in the same high quality.

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    1. Thank you so much for these kind words of continuing encouragement. I am enjoying working at the writing so very much.

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  3. Well that was very good. You seem to be on a very good run these days! I remember your superb haibun of some Yeats back (!) and really great minimalist haiku recently. Nice to see tanka in the same high quality.

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  4. I like the way your tanka builds up flake on flake, Janice, right up to the avalanche!

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  5. It is a build-up that takes some time. But still many are caught unawares!

    Hank

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    1. Yes, it is easy to not pay attention to what is going on around.

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  6. Hari Om
    I'm with the drift of comments Janice - this one is a winner! YAM xx

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    1. Thank you, YAM.
      I am called a snowflake cause I am resisting. There are a bunch of us snowflakes. janice xx

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  7. A nice tanka Janice with a strong and very sad ending.

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    1. Yes, it is sad. Also, part of nature. Broken silence.

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  8. The silence before the impending storm. Ominous. Nice haiku !

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  9. Wonderful Janice! I especially like the contrast - silence and then like a chock comes the avalanche :)

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