Sad,yes but beautifully written. Now what if this were a woman talking about her loss... in solitude wrapped in erotic memoirs a daisy petal path he walked in empty promises she never expected love.
As we prepare to celebrate our 50th wedding anniversary the end of this month a reread of this makes me feel so fortunate. Glad you appreciated the tanka.
Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #38 A Trip Along Memory Lane #1 Carpe Diem Special How happy! Bathing in the tub full to overflowing The above one line poem by Sumitaku Kenshin (1961-1987) really sent me down memory lane. Until I was a teenager my family lived on a farm. The year Sumitaku Kenshin was born, my family moved "in town". That move brought us into a new age, indoor plumbing. Until that time there was a galvanized tub for baths and a path for other bodily necessities. Baths were taken on the screened in back porch during the summer months. There would be 3 to 4 inches of water in the tub. Water drawn from the well just outside the house. Some of the water would be heated in the teakettle on the stove in the kitchen. Youngest child would bath first. Then up through the ages of the children. Daddy was always the last. In the same 3 to 4 inches of water. Once baths were done, the tub was overturned and the porch scrubbed. Cause water was is
Hari OM
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It happens. janice xx
DeletePoignant petals on that rosy path, Janice.
ReplyDeleteYes, they are, Kim.
DeleteIf only...!!
ReplyDeleteToo often these days.
DeleteYes, a poignant piece..
ReplyDeleteI thought the prompt poetry had that feeling, too.
Deleteshe walked in white illusion
ReplyDeleteif only love had been there
Love can take different forms under various pretexts.
Hank
Yes, it can. Janice
DeleteInsightful haiku.
ReplyDeleteWas just thinking about all the folks who had made it to 50 years together.
DeleteSad,yes but beautifully written. Now what if this were a woman talking about her loss...
ReplyDeletein solitude
wrapped in erotic memoirs
a daisy petal path
he walked in empty promises
she never expected love.
Ooooo, good one!
DeleteWow ... a wonderful tanka Janice.
ReplyDeleteAs we prepare to celebrate our 50th wedding anniversary the end of this month a reread of this makes me feel so fortunate. Glad you appreciated the tanka.
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