teacher

Carpe Diem #1123 the road is our teacher

crunching
against the leather soles
pebbles speak
youthful feet skip not hearing
pilgrim moves in harmony

©  petra domina

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI

Comments

  1. Well you did teo things there....you found a brilliant angle in those first three lines to describe the sound of pebbles, andcompleted with two lines that played so well with the concept. Really enjoyed.

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    1. Great! Thanks for your kind comments, Hamish. You are doing many fine works but no place to leave feedback. janice

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  2. I like the sound and personification in this tanka - they create a sense of movement together with those youthful feet!

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  3. :-) a great image and the onomatopoeic crunching brought the tanka alive from the very beginning. Bastet

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    1. Good to hear from you, Bastet! Hope all is well with you.

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  4. Such a long journey and there must hve been hours of silence...the crunching of the pebbles must have echoed so loudly...beautiful tanka, Janice!

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    1. Thank you C-L. I loved my backyard rock paths and the crunch sound as I walked and worked.

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