Very nice .minimalist...however...this is a haiku for me..I think two full lines of conclusion would elevate your thought you were expressing, or take further..
I am experimenting with the fewest words possible. I need to see if better vocabulary could expand the thought. Always appreciate your guidance, Hamish!
Very nice .minimalist...however...this is a haiku for me..I think two full lines of conclusion would elevate your thought you were expressing, or take further..
Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #38 A Trip Along Memory Lane #1 Carpe Diem Special How happy! Bathing in the tub full to overflowing The above one line poem by Sumitaku Kenshin (1961-1987) really sent me down memory lane. Until I was a teenager my family lived on a farm. The year Sumitaku Kenshin was born, my family moved "in town". That move brought us into a new age, indoor plumbing. Until that time there was a galvanized tub for baths and a path for other bodily necessities. Baths were taken on the screened in back porch during the summer months. There would be 3 to 4 inches of water in the tub. Water drawn from the well just outside the house. Some of the water would be heated in the teakettle on the stove in the kitchen. Youngest child would bath first. Then up through the ages of the children. Daddy was always the last. In the same 3 to 4 inches of water. Once baths were done, the tub was overturned and the porch scrubbed. Cause water was is
Lively, Janice.
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ReplyDeleteLove's warmth can be therapeutic! Yes, Janice!
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Yes, it can be. Janice
Deletecompact and concise :)
ReplyDeleteTrying that as a style for a time.
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ReplyDelete.minimalist...however...this is a haiku for me..I think two full lines of conclusion would elevate your thought you were expressing, or take further..
I am experimenting with the fewest words possible. I need to see if better vocabulary could expand the thought. Always appreciate your guidance, Hamish!
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ReplyDelete.minimalist...however...this is a haiku for me..I think two full lines of conclusion would elevate your thought you were expressing, or take further..
Simplistic and beautiful!
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DeleteI coudl just picture a seed - that is so sweet!
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DeleteYou can feel the growth in this. Lovely, Janice.
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DeleteA nice "minimal" tanka, a bit like Santoka Taneda, who was a haiku poet of the so called "free-style"
ReplyDeleteAn experiment on what can be done with the fewest words. thanks for stopping by!
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