Thursday, November 3, 2016

autumn scenes

Carpe Diem Universal Jane #5 autumn scenes


leaf covered
the stone walkway greets
with a crunch
childhood memories wash
across your feet with each step

©  petra domina


Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI



6 comments:

  1. Hari OM
    HAH - I had exactly that experience couple days ago - crunchy orange leaves are a bit of a rarity in the usually sodden weather here - but we've actually had a dry one this year and in walking through a pile, I heard the crackle of them underfoot and immediately was cast back fifty years... see what you evoked??!! YAM xx

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    1. I am smiling that you could have a memory of a long ago fall. Hope it was a good one! janice xx

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  2. Nicely written Janice. This tanka for sure brings back memories of years ago. The sweet sound of crunching leaves and that sweet perfume of autumn ... ah ... I sense autumn.

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    1. Missed the mark on the love letter. If I changed the childhood line to "tender memories of you wash" then change your to my in the last line, it might work...

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    2. I love the sound of leaves underfoot in this one, Janice!

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    3. Great! Thanks for your kind comment! I am always pleased when someone enjoys parts or all of a work.

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