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Friday, October 7, 2016

the night has fallen

Carpe Diem Special (3rd guest) Herman van Rompuy "the night has fallen"


hundreds of crows' wings
sweeping the light from the sky
above the new grave

©  petra domina

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Inspired by the following partial post from CDHK:

[ ".. I have searched for haiku written by him all over the globe (of course virtually) and found several beauties. I hope to inspire you with these haiku written by Herman van Rompuy.

the night has fallen
the bare branches can be seen
even more lonely

© Herman van Rompuy

This haiku, in my opinion, resonates in tune with the time of year, but in this haiku I also sense a reflection of that wonderful haiku by Matsuo Basho (1644-1694):

kare eda ni karasu no tomarikeri aki no kure

on a bare branch
a crow has stopped
autumn dusk

© Matsuo Basho

... o stay more close to the haiku of Herman van Rompuy I created the following haiku:

the last sunrays
painting shadows on the white wall
abandoned farm

© Chèvrefeuille

In this one I think I stayed as close as possible to the loneliness Herman van Rompuy paints in his haiku. ..."]

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI


8 comments:

  1. The atmosphere of this haiku is very strong. It makes the loneliness heavier ... well done Janice.

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    1. Thank you for such kind words. I had just watched the droves of crows flying overhead earlier in the late evening last light. All I could think of was how they were sweeping away the light.

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  2. Hari OM
    A picture easily 'seen'... perfectly penned. YAM xx

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  3. Wonderful, simple portrait of loneliness, Janice.

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