riversong
Carpe Diem Universal Jane #3 riversong
riversong
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold © Jane Reichhold
flows over the smooth stones
with a gentle kiss goodby
caught
by rocky hands
golden prisoners
tarnished by the pounding flow
gold becomes the river mud
in a baptism
for new life
from the depth a seed takes hold
by and by new riversongs
© petra domina
Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on
So deep images, great!
ReplyDeletethank you!
DeleteVery nicely done, Janice :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jen. Hope to get caught up on reading other posts.
DeleteI really like the way you have repeated the word 'by' and the following lines are beautiful:
ReplyDeleteflows over the smooth stones
with a gentle kiss goodby
tarnished by the pounding flow
gold becomes the river mud
from the depth a seed takes hold
by and by new riversongs
Kim, I really did not even realize it till you mentioned the 'by' repetition. Another muse amusing themselves!
Deleteso beautiful.... well done !
ReplyDeleteThanks so much!
DeleteSo beautiful, it is a marvelous expression.
ReplyDeleteI truly appreciate your kind words.
DeleteHari OM
ReplyDeleteRippling words conveying the scene! YAM xx
Thanks!
DeleteAwesome Janice what a fine Soliloquy no Renga. .. Chapeau. That repetition makes it strong.
ReplyDeleteAwesome Janice what a fine Soliloquy no Renga. .. Chapeau. That repetition makes it strong.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your generous praise.
DeleteA very good job Janice.
ReplyDeleteThanks, jazzy tower
Deletefrom the depth a seed takes hold
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The eventual success of procreating a lineage of good people! Wonderful lines Janice!
Hank
I am so pleased you enjoyed this, Hank.
DeleteI love the story you created from 'caught by rocky hands' to 'new riversongs'. janice (ontheland)
ReplyDeletePlease to have written something you could enjoy!
DeleteWhat a treat to read this, Janice!! love the underlying message here and your two last lines kiss the entire masterpiece.
ReplyDeleteSuch kind words! Glad you enjoyed, Cheryl-Lynn.
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