South Padre Island

South Padre Island

Thursday, October 20, 2016

full circle

Carpe Diem Full Circle #2-2016



rain flows
across the young leaves
dropping on buds

mountain silence nourishes
the souls of young monks who hear

river flows
beneath the summer breeze
the she-wolf drinks

pecking through the early snow
startled sparrow takes flight

cold blue sky
gives way to spring
again rain flows

©  petra domina

This challenge was to use the following words in order to create haiku.

1. rain
2. young leaves
3. buds
4. mountain
5. silence
6. monk
7. river
8. summer breeze
9. she
10. snow
11. sparrow (s)
12. blue sky

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI

10 comments:

  1. I like the mixed form and the circular flow from rain back to rain! My favourite lines:

    'river flows
    beneath the summer breeze
    the she-wolf drinks'

    and

    'pecking through the early snow
    startled sparrow takes flight'

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    1. Thanks you for the comment. The way the muses and the brain work together is delightful to experience. All I knew was it had to be a she-wolf.

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    1. Thanks Ral, high compliment coming from you.

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  3. Hari OM
    Janice, this excels... linking mountain, silence and monk... sublime... YAM xx

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    1. Good evening, YAM
      I bow in thanks to your praise. janice xx

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  4. You wove a beautiful circle with your words

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  5. Beautifully written, Janice!! flowing so nicely and I imagined the monk seeing the she wolf....love your imagery!!

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    1. Glad you enjoyed. Did not think of the monk seeing the she wolf.

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