South Padre Island

South Padre Island

Wednesday, September 7, 2016

dawn

Carpe Diem #1046 dawn

muses 
ride the dawn
of ideas

©  petra domina

Chèvrefeuille's prompt:

Here are a few examples of haiku written by Jane on this kigo "dawn":

rosy dawn
colors the moon
into the sea

spring dawn
darkness flies from the trees
with the bird

the sound of waves
on you sleeping face
dawn light

© Jane Reichhold

Three wonderful haiku in which you can find a clear "fragment and phrase" way of writing. It's how Jane explained how haiku has to be in another language than Japanese.

her naked body
glistens from sweat
after a hot night

© Chèvrefeuille

In this haiku "the fragment and phrase" is in "her naked body" and "glistens from sweat after a hot night"; but it can also be like this: "her naked body glistens from sweat" and "after a hot night". That also is a "fragment and phrase" way of writing haiku.

Another one:

daylight brightens
a rooster crows his sun greet
the silence deepens

© Chèvrefeuille

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI


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