Monday, May 30, 2016

bay spring flowers

Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge Month May 31st: a haiku by Basho

The last of the May Tan Renga Challenge month.  A haiku is used as an inspiration for a two stanza response.  When a haiku is used in this way is is named a hokku.

do not doubt it,
the bay has its spring too,
the flowers of the tide                   © Basho (1644-1694)
flow from the warm river mouth
stripers have a shad picnic              petra domina

Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI


10 comments:

  1. Nice contrast here, also first line goes so smoothly, second one - brings the surprising revelation for readers ~ very cool!

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    1. Thank you, nothing like a little surprise ending!

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  2. Oh, I love this "river mouth"...I wanted to bring in a river but did not how to word it...you did it so beautifully, my dear!

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    1. I cheated, as usual. Went on line and read about bay activity in spring time. And there is where the river mouth came to mind.

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  3. That's not cheating Janice, it's excellent research! I too rather enjoyed this a lot!

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    1. Ok, so it is learning and allowing other input! Glad you rather enjoyed this one .. a lot!

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  4. I agree with Humbird's thoughts on this..very well done Janice:)

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    1. I was not even thinking of it as a surprise ending, just writing about Nature's events. Thanks for the kind comment.

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