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Monday, March 14, 2016

Old Pond

Carpe Diem #939 Old Pond


old pond
a frog jumps into
the sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

In this haiku Basho uses the "sense switching" technique, a technique which we have seen in our second series of haiku writing techniques last year.

pine and cedar
to admire the wind
smell the sound

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

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unheard
baby cries quelled
amniotic fluid
in warmth of womb baby swims
mom smiles as movement felt

©  Janice 'petra domina' Adcock
Thanks to Chèvrefeuille for daily prompts on 

CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI


9 comments:

  1. Now that's a different and lovely take on sense switching. :)

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    1. Well, it is something a mom always remembers..

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  2. You certainly are not resting on yr laurels, but rather taking us in new directions! Bravo!

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    1. Glad you liked this take. Was not sure if it covered senses in the basic haiku so just make a tanka. Thank you for your generous comment.

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  3. A sublime one ! I love the switching of the senses you create here ! Wow !

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    2. Kindly have a look at my post of the same @ https://rajkumarmilan.wordpress.com/2016/03/17/taste-and-smell/

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